Post by Stephan on Dec 11, 2003 17:25:08 GMT -5
i wrote a poem about some things in my life. it's about my sister who is very sick for 2 years now. and when i heard my immortal something broke in me. and the following poem came out.
please tell me what you think of this poem.
Sometimes I feel like drifting away,
From a place I can never stay.
Sometimes you make me wish,
You wouldn’t be the one I could miss.
You make my mind confused,
And make me feel used.
When I think it’s the end,
You let me know that you’re not spent.
Sometimes you look so weak,
Praying to get the help you seek.
But then again you’re so strong,
And I’ll know you’ll keep livin’ on.
Deep in my heart I know,
You won’t be on death row.
You will get a happy life,
And love will be your drive.
Sometimes I think you’re scared,
Scared to release all the feelings you bared.
Scared to let anyone make you better,
And unlike you, we think it does matter.
Please let loose all the things inside of you,
Because that’s the thing I feel you should do.
I know that it’s fearsome to do a thing like that,
But an improvement is the only thing you’ll get.
And remember that we will never let you down,
For me you’re still the girl with a silver crown.
A girl that will never ever give up,
Even if her heart would stop.
You’re mom and dad love you more than everything,
More then is ever possible with imagining.
Now please break down your protective wall,
And let them help you for the sake of us all.
It doesn’t matter what people think of your being,
Love, just and care is all that they are seeing.
Let your blond hair and beautiful face do it’s duty,
And let everybody say once again: you’re a cuty.
thx
please tell me what you think of this poem.
Sometimes I feel like drifting away,
From a place I can never stay.
Sometimes you make me wish,
You wouldn’t be the one I could miss.
You make my mind confused,
And make me feel used.
When I think it’s the end,
You let me know that you’re not spent.
Sometimes you look so weak,
Praying to get the help you seek.
But then again you’re so strong,
And I’ll know you’ll keep livin’ on.
Deep in my heart I know,
You won’t be on death row.
You will get a happy life,
And love will be your drive.
Sometimes I think you’re scared,
Scared to release all the feelings you bared.
Scared to let anyone make you better,
And unlike you, we think it does matter.
Please let loose all the things inside of you,
Because that’s the thing I feel you should do.
I know that it’s fearsome to do a thing like that,
But an improvement is the only thing you’ll get.
And remember that we will never let you down,
For me you’re still the girl with a silver crown.
A girl that will never ever give up,
Even if her heart would stop.
You’re mom and dad love you more than everything,
More then is ever possible with imagining.
Now please break down your protective wall,
And let them help you for the sake of us all.
It doesn’t matter what people think of your being,
Love, just and care is all that they are seeing.
Let your blond hair and beautiful face do it’s duty,
And let everybody say once again: you’re a cuty.
thx